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Ninth Grade

Enghelab Secondary School 11 months ago

پرنیان گیوکی

Teacher came in class and said:"Parniyan! Can you explain that what are adjectives?" I said:"Yes,but I should explain it with some examples." She said:"Ok,come and write your examples on the board." I wrote five sentences on the board. The first one was "Some people are angry because of illness." The second one was "I saw a brave soldier who fought with the gun." The third one was"Daesh is a cruel group." The fourth one was"Clever people can learn every thing quickly." And the last one was"Careless people can't pay attention to important things." I undeclever angry,brave,clever,careless and cruel and started to explain.

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Teacher came in class and said, "Parniyan! Can you explain what adjectives are?"
I said, "Yes,but I should explain it with some examples."
She said, "Ok,come and write your examples on the board."
I wrote five sentences on the board.
The first one was "Some people are angry because of illness." 
The second one was "I saw a brave soldier who fought with the gun."
The third one was"Daesh is a cruel group."
The fourth one was"Clever people can learn everything quickly."
And the last one was "Careless people can't pay attention to important things."
I understood angry,brave,clever,careless and cruel and started to explain.
 

بهتر است هنگام نقل قول ، پیش از گیومه از کاما استفاده کنیم. شما از دونقطه استفاده کرده بودید
به جملات زیر دقت کنید
What are adjectives?  (جمله ی سوالی)

Please explain adjectives. (جمله ی امری)

Please explain what adjectives are. (جمله ی امری به همراه نقل قول غیر مستقیم)
نقل قول غیر مستقیم = indirect speech

دقت کنید که جمله ی زیر غلط است
please explain what are adjectives. (اشتباه است. )

Please explain what adjectives are. (معنا به فارسی: لطفا توضیح دهید صفات چی هستند)

Can you explain adjectives? (جمله ی پرسشی)
Can you explain what adjectives are?   (جمله ی پرسشی به همراه نقل قول غیر مستقیم)
can you explain what are adjectives? (اشتباه است. لطفا این اشتباه را تکرار نفرمایید)

املای صحیح و رایج تر واژه ی زیر بدون گذاشتن فاصله هست
everything


Marzdaran Secondary School 11 months ago

امیرمحمد حق مدد میلانی

People have different personalities.My friend is selfish and a teacher's pet.He is so extrovert and talkative person.ISIS members are really cruel.Ants are more than humans.Doctors are really kind as angels.My mother is so patient.I don't think he is funny.Sometimes I doubt because my brother is quiet.My cousin is really rude,He doesn't know how to behave.You can be serious as teachers.You shouldn't have been careless.I'm really nervous about quizzes.He is my clever son.I upset with you man.I shouldn't have been angry with her.I have broken my shoulder.He had eaten my lunch and then I ate his lunch.

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My friend is selfish and a teacher's pet. (It does not make sense!)
I upset with you man. -> I am upset with you man.

Resalat Secondary School Last year

عسل سادات ناصر صدر آبادى

Last year we decided to have a birthday party for my mom ,so we invited all of her friends .One of her friends invited her to the shopping center while we were waiting at home. We turned off all the lamps when she came back my father with a cake was standing in the middle of the door. She shouted and we sang Happy Birthday to you!!

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Last year"," we decided to have a birthday party for my mom, so we invited all of her friends. One of her friends invited her to the shopping center while we were waiting at home. We turned off all the lamps"." When she came back my father with a cake was standing in the middle of the door. She shouted and "we sang 'Happy Birthday to You!!'."
"Be careful about the spaces between your sentences."
Resalat Secondary School Last year

دیانا اندی فکر

I went to the sea with my father when I was 10 years old.I can't forget it.He taught me how to swim. I always have a very nice time with my parents especially my father.

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I went to the sea with my father when I was 10 years old.
I can't forget it. He taught me how to swim.
I always have a very nice time with my parents especially my father.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

عسل بهروز

It was my birthday and I was very upset because my father wasn't in Iran. After 9 hours the bell rang when I opened the door,I saw my father .I was so delighted . He bought a lot of things as a gift for me. It was the best memory that I have with my father . We should thank them and what I learn from my father is that I should make people happy and I love it because my father surprized me.

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After 9 hours, the bell rang. When I opened the door, I saw my father.
He "had" bought a lot of things as "gifts" for me. 

*  s u r p r i s e
Resalat Secondary School Last year

ملیکا طهماسبی

My best memory with my father was that one day I went to the sea with my father when I was 6 years old. I like this memory because I always have a very nice time with my father. I learnt from my father that I can swim very well.

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Excellent!
Try to make as many one word, one sentences and trains of ideas as you can and send them for us to get stronger in English.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

درسا پيوندى

My best memory with my father is that one day he took me to the cinema, because my mother had a math class and we had nothing to do and we were bored. We decided to go to the cinema. Actually we had 2 tickets for 2:00 o'clock but we were there at 12:00. We had a lot of time until the movie began. So, we decided to see the other parts of the cinema. First, we went to the CD-shop and I bought a thriller movie. After that, we went to the waiting room and we wanted to wait until our film started. My father is very curious, so he couldn't sit and wait. He walked around to see the other halls. He saw a hall in which just 2 or 3 people were watching a comedy movie and nobody was checking the tickets. So we went there and watched another movie in our free time and enjoyed it a lot. I like this memory because it was my first time that I went to the cinema with my father and now when I think about it I laugh so much. I have learnt from my father that we can have lots of fun in every situation; we should just think and decide.

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My best memory with my father is that one day he took me to the cinema, because my mother had a math class and we had nothing to do and we were bored. We decided to go to the cinema. Actually we had 2 tickets for 2 o'clock but we were there at 12:00. We had a lot of time until the movie began. So, we decided to see the other parts of the cinema. First, we went to the CD-shop and I bought a thriller movie. 
After that, we went to the waiting room and we "decided to" wait until our film started. My father is very curious, so he couldn't sit and wait. He walked around to see the other halls. He saw a hall in which just 2 or 3 people were watching a comedy movie and nobody was checking the tickets. So we went there and watched another movie in our free time and enjoyed it a lot. I like this memory because it was my first time that I went to the cinema with my father and now when I think about it I laugh so much. I have learnt from my father that we can have lots of fun in every situation; we should just think and decide.

* First, we went to a CD-shop there.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

ثنا صدر

My best memory with my father belongs to a day when I was six and my father and I decided to go to the zoo. that was because when I was a child I loved animals and I love them now too . We went to the zoo and there I saw big elephants, wild lions ,crocodiles with sharp teeth and funny parrots. On that day I learned a lot of new things about animals from my father. for example I learned what a lion likes for eating? or how a parrot flies ? I like this memory because that day was so good for me and I learned so many things about animals and their life. I suggest you to go to the zoo with your father because you will learn new things.

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My best memory with my father belongs to a day when I was six and my father and I decided to go to the zoo. that was because when I was a child I loved animals and I love them now too. We went to the zoo and there I saw big elephants, wild lions, crocodiles with sharp teeth and funny parrots. On that day I learned a lot of new things   about animals from my father. "For" example I learned what a lion likes for eating, or how a parrot flies. I like this memory because that day was so good for me and I learned so many things about animals and their life. I suggest you to go to the zoo with your father because you will learn new things.
"Be careful about the punctuation marks and spaces between your sentences."
Resalat Secondary School Last year

نگار منصور

My best memory with my father refers to one day in summer when we went to Mahan gym and i was starting to take archery seriously . I like this memory because I'm interested in archery and I have learnt from my father that I can do everything I want.

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My best memory with my father refers to one day in summer when we went to Mahan gym and "I" was starting to take archery seriously. I like this memory because I'm interested in archery and I have learnt from my father that I can do everything I want.
"Be careful about the spaces between your sentences."
Resalat Secondary School Last year

مائده كريمى

The best lesson I learned from my father in my life is about when I was 7. One day a friend of mine broke down my puppet that I loved and I became sad and upset and I cried. When my father noticed that he bought a new and better puppet for me and he taught me not to depend heavily on my things. Thank you

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‏The best lesson I learned from my father in my life is about when I was 7.
One day, a friend of mine broke down my puppet that I loved and I became sad and upset and I cried. 
When my father noticed that, he bought a new and better puppet for me and he taught me not to depend heavily on my things.
Thank you

* ‏The best lesson I have learned from my father in my life goes back to the period of time when I was 7.
* When my father (noticed/understood/recognized/became aware of) what had happened, he bought me a new and even better puppet.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

هيوا يادگار

One of my best memories with my father refers to the last summer when I learnt fishing . I like this memory because I had good times with my father. I have learnt from my father how to make fish on the fire and also I have learnt fishing.

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Enghelab Secondary School Last year

پریسا نرج آبادی

A MEMORY WITH MY DADDY It's 7 pm and I'm trying to write about a memory with my dad and now, my whole life is coming through my eyes and I'm trying to choose the best memory with my dad. If I could write a story, it would be the greatest ever told of a kind and loving father who had a heart of gold and if I could write a million pages, I'll still be unable to say just how much I love him. Now, that I sit and look back to how far I can remember, I see that he is always next to me. He is there in every memory. I see his love and care, strength and hands to count on, freely he does share, provider, toil so faithfully to make our dreams come true , give strong and tender discipline and more to say He is my hero, maybe not known by the world, but he is everything to me. Till now, he taught me a lot of things. He taught me right from wrong, he instilled in me the values, that one day I'd be strong, he taught me face my fears and defeat with them. I think all these things that I remembered, are the most beautiful memories I have about my daddy. I love my daddy to the moon and back and I'm thankful for having a dad like him Parisa narj abadi

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A MEMORY WITH MY DADDY

It's 7 "PM" and I'm trying to write about a memory with my dad and now, my whole life is coming through my eyes and I'm trying to choose the best memory with my dad.
If I could write a story, it would be the greatest ever told of a kind and loving father who had a heart of gold and if I could write a million pages, I'll still be unable to say just how much I love him.
Now, that I sit and look back to how far I can remember, I see that he is always next to me. He is there in every memory. I see his love and care, strength and hands to count on, "freely sharing, providing and toiling so faithfully to make our dreams come true, giving strength and tendering discipline" and more to say…
He is my hero, maybe not known by the world, but he is everything to me.
Till now, he taught me a lot of things. He taught me "to distinguish right from wrong. He" instilled in me the values, that one day "I will" be "strong. He" taught me face my fears and "defeat them".
I think all these things that I remembered, are the most beautiful memories I have about my daddy.
I love my daddy to the moon and back and I'm thankful for having a dad like him"."

Parisa "Narj abadi"
Enghelab Secondary School Last year

فاطمه خواستان

My Best Memory With My Father ...Is that ; One day, I was walking in a park with my father and a beggar came to us and asked for some money , My father gave him some and I was shocked by what my father did and as soon as that Man left I told him "Dad why would you do that ? He didn't seem to really need the money, He was just acting", my dad replied "Never judge humans by their appearances, theres a story behind every person and there's a reason that they are the way they are, Do what makes you feel good inside" I like this memory because I learned to forgive. بهترين خاطره من با پدرم اين است كه یک روز،همراه پدرم در پارک قدم میزدم و یک گدا به پیش ما آمد و برای مقداری پول درخواست کرد،پدرم مقداری به او داد و من از کارش شوکه شدم و لحظه ای که آن مرد رفت به پدرم گفتم "بابا چرا اون کارو انجام دادی؟اون به نظر نمیرسید که واقعا به پول احتیاج داشته باشه اون فقط فیلم بازی میکرد " پدرم پاسخ داد " هرگز انسان هارو بر اساس ظاهرشون قضاوت نکن ، پشت هر انسان یک قصه ای هست و دلیلی دارد که آن ها اینگونه هستند ، آنچه را انجام بده که باعث احساس خوب درونی در تو میشود. من اين خاطره را دوست دارم چون ياد گرفتم كه ببخشم

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"My Best Memory with My Father"

One day, I was walking in a park with my father and a beggar came to us and asked for some money. My father gave him some and I was shocked by what my father did. As soon as  the man left I told him: "Dad, why would you do that? He didn't seem to really need the money. He was just acting,"
My dad replied: "Never judge humans by their appearances; there’s a story behind every person and there's a reason that they are the way they are. Do what makes you feel good inside."
I like this memory because I learned to forgive. (or better to say I learned to show charity/generosity.) (I learned to be generous/charitable to people.)

بهترين خاطره من با پدرم
اين است كه یک روز،همراه پدرم در پارک قدم میزدم و یک گدا به پیش ما آمد و برای مقداری پول درخواست   
کرد،پدرم مقداری به او داد و من از کارش شوکه شدم و لحظه ای که آن مرد رفت به پدرم گفتم "بابا چرا اون
کارو انجام دادی؟اون به نظر نمیرسید که واقعا به پول احتیاج داشته باشه اون فقط فیلم بازی میکرد " پدرم 
پاسخ داد " هرگز انسان هارو بر اساس ظاهرشون قضاوت نکن ، پشت هر انسان یک قصه ای هست و دلیلی دارد
 که آن ها اینگونه هستند ، آنچه را انجام بده که باعث احساس خوب درونی در تو میشود.
 من اين خاطره را دوست دارم چون ياد گرفتم كه ببخشم
Enghelab Secondary School Last year

پرنیان گیوکی

My best memory with my father is that one day we went to cinema to watch a social movie. The movie was about a big family that had many problems such as poverty and drug addiction. They were living in a small house like ruins. At the end of the movie, I asked my father: Is there still in a big city like Tehran such these families? He answered: Yes, In downtown there are still families like these. They need help in their life and we have to help them. I asked my father one day to go downtown areas to see problems up close. I like this memory because after that I look around more carefully to see problems and help to solve problems. I have learnt from my father that I have to help poor people and thank my God because Im not like them. بهترین خاطره من با پدرم این است که یک روز به سینما رفتیم تا یک فیلم اجتماعی تماشا کنیم.فیلم درباره خانواده بزرگی بود که مشکلات زیادی از قبیل فقر و اعتیاد داشت.آنها در یک خانه کوچک مانند خرابه زندگی می کردند. در پایان فیلم، از پدرم پرسیدم:«آیا هنوز در شهر بزرگی مانند تهران خانواده هایی از این قبیل وجود دارد؟» پدرم پاسخ داد:«بله، در پایین شهر هنوز چنین خانواده هایی وجود دارد.آنها در زندگی شان به کمک نیاز دارند و ما باید به آنها کمک کنیم.» از پدرم خواستم یک روز به مناطق پایین شهر برویم تا مشکلات را از نزدیک ببینیم. من این خاطره را دوست دارم چون پس از آن با دقت بیشتری به اطرافم نگاه می کنم تا مشکلات را ببینم و درحل کردن مشکلات کمک کنم. من از پدرم یاد گرفتم که باید به مردم فقیر کمک کنم و خدا را شکر کنم که مثل آنها نیستم.

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My best memory with my father is that one day we “went to the cinema” to watch a social movie.
The movie was about a big family that had many problems such as poverty and drug addiction.
They were living in a small house like ruins. At the end of the movie, I asked my father: “Are there still such families in a big city like Tehran?”
He answered: “Yes, in downtown there are still families like these. They need help in their life and we have to help them.”
I asked my father one day to go to downtown areas to see problems “from” close.
I like this memory because after that I look around more carefully to see problems and help (to) solve problems.
I have learnt from my father that I have to help poor people and thank my God because I’m not like them.

* "go downtown" or "go to downtown areas" 
Your writing was excellent. I have just made some small modifications and corrections.

بهترین خاطره من با پدرم این است که یک روز به سینما رفتیم تا یک فیلم اجتماعی تماشا کنیم.فیلم درباره خانواده بزرگی بود که مشکلات زیادی از قبیل فقر و اعتیاد داشت.آنها در یک خانه کوچک مانند خرابه زندگی می کردند. در پایان فیلم، از پدرم پرسیدم:«آیا هنوز در شهر بزرگی مانند تهران خانواده هایی از این قبیل وجود دارد؟» پدرم پاسخ داد:«بله، در پایین شهر هنوز چنین خانواده هایی وجود دارد.آنها در زندگی شان به کمک نیاز دارند و ما باید به آنها کمک کنیم.» از پدرم خواستم یک روز به مناطق پایین شهر برویم تا مشکلات را از نزدیک ببینیم. من این خاطره را دوست دارم چون پس از آن با دقت بیشتری به اطرافم نگاه می کنم تا مشکلات را ببینم و درحل کردن مشکلات کمک کنم. من از پدرم یاد گرفتم که باید به مردم فقیر کمک کنم و خدا را شکر کنم که مثل آنها نیستم. 
Enghelab Secondary School Last year

درسا ابریشم کار

My best memory with my father is that one day he taught me not to be scared of losing.This memory is about seven years ago.I was playing tennis with my sister,but I could not play well.I got sad when I found out that she won the game.After that I did not continue playing tennis anymore.My father came to me and said being a loser is not always bad.It makes you try harder and harder.You should not consider losing from this point of view.You should think about it as a good thing in your life.Losing is not the end.I like this memory because I learnt that I should do my best and use losing as an experience.What I learnt from my father is that I may sometimes not be the winner.

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My best memory with my father is that one day he taught me not to be scared of losing. This memory is about seven years ago. I was playing tennis with my sister, but I could not play well. I got sad when I found out that she won the game. After that, I did not continue playing tennis anymore. 
My father came to me and said being a loser is not always bad. It makes you try harder and harder. You should not consider losing from this point of view. You should think about it as a good thing in your life. Losing is not the end. 
I like this memory because I learnt that I should do my best and use my "failure" as an experience. What I learnt from my father is that I may sometimes not be the winner.

* Please put a space after punctuation marks.
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* Great job. Excellent. 
Enghelab Secondary School Last year

هستی چشمی

The Experience of Cooking New Food My best memory with my father is that once my father and I went to the shopping center to buy things from it for our home , my father and I saw the advertisement of the new food , it was interesting for us so we bought the ingredients and we went back home , when my mother saw that goods became surprised to see what we would make together , it was our first cooking , we almost tried really hard and used the best ingredients . with the advertisement paper it took about 4 hours making it , it was a mixture of pasta and lamb and also cheese , which serves with special vegetables , it was our first experience and at first we didn't know how to make it but my mother helped us a lot nevertheless we were supposed to done it alone . At the end , it was the most tasty food I've ever eat and all the family liked it very much how ever it was our last experience , too because we weren't such a good cook and we were massing the kitchen but my mother came at the time and saved it . I learned we should do experiment to learn about them , it was a riminscence of our cooking together , I hope you've enjoyed it. Hasti Cheshmi

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                                                    "The Experience of Cooking New Food "
My best memory with my father is that once my father and I went to "a" shopping center to buy things from it for our home. My father and I saw the advertisement of a new food; it was interesting for us so we bought the ingredients and we went back home. When my mother saw "the goods we had bought", she became surprised to see what we would make together.
It was our first cooking experience. We almost tried really hard and used the best ingredients. With the advertisement paper it took about 4 hours making it, it was a mixture of pasta and lamb and also cheese, which serves with special vegetables. It was our first experience and at first we didn't know how to make it but my mother helped us a lot. Nevertheless, we were "supposed to do" it alone .
At the end, it was the most tasty food I'd ever eaten and all the family liked it very much. "However" it was our last experience, too because we weren't such "good cooks" and we were "messing" the kitchen but my mother came at the time and saved it .
I learned we should do "experiments" (in order) to learn about new opportunities. It was a "reminiscence" of our cooking together, I hope you've enjoyed it.
Hasti Cheshmi 

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I've mad some small modifications to your essay. Please find them.Thanks.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

آیدا اقبالی

My best memory with my father "was in a holiday". My father and I decided to go to the park. We walked for a long time and he told me about his childhood memories. We laughed a lot together. We played volleyball together"," then "we" went to "a" famous restaurant and had dinner. I like this memory because when I get tired, I go out with my cheerful father. I learnt from my father "to be happy and patient while going out."

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Resalat Secondary School Last year

ماهرخ بهنام

About one year ago, my mother talked with me about one amazing book that she had read when she was a child. So I bought it and started to read it. It took two days to read it. It was too exciting so I stayed up late every night to finish it as soon as possible. The name of that book was The sound of the wild. It is written by Jack London. In the story, there was a dog whose name was Bak. The story was about Bak`s life. Bak was a dog who lived with his owner. After a while when his owner died, he went to the North Pole because of some reasons. In the North Pole he had to work all day long. At the end of the story, Bak died. It was really an event full of sadness. I learnt many things from this story. The most important one is that we all will die one day. So its better to make our life more and more useful for everyone. I suggest all people read this book as soon as they can.

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Resalat High School Last year

زهرا باقرى

The story of the ugly duckling is about an ugly duckling who was always lonely and nobody ever talked to him because of his appearance. But the duckling was very kind and when he grew up to be a white majestic creature. This book was created by Hans Christian Andersen and my mother gave it to me as a birthday gift. I really love this book because thought me that everything is not appearance and that we shouldn't judge a book by it's cover.

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The story of the ugly duckling is about an ugly duckling who was always lonely and nobody ever talked to him because of his appearance. But the duckling was very kind and he grew up to be a white majestic creature. 
This book was created by Hans Christian Andersen and my mother gave it to me as a birthday gift. I really love this book because it thought me that everything is not appearance and that we shouldn't judge a book by its cover. 
Resalat High School Last year

سايه صادق نيا

Who cares of children? 70% of women in all around the world work outside. Monetary factors influence women to work. Some are employed full time ,some part time and some seek creative solution such as flextime work schedules and job sharing . Many are single mother raising children by themselves. But in most cases one income in the household is not enough. So both parents work to support the family. There are 3 kinds of family :Extended family, single parent family and blended family. Who cares of children? Answer to this question are varied: 1.Some parents put children in day care facilities. 2.Individuals or couples that are wealthy enough have a nanny. In some cases the woman's salary is adequate for family expenses, and the father becomes the house husband.

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Who takes care of children? 70% of women all around the world work outside. Monetary factors influence women to work. Some are employed full time, some part time and some seek creative solutions such as flextime work schedules and job sharing. 
Many are single mothers who are raising children by themselves. But in most cases one income in the household is not enough. So both parents work to support the family. There are 3 kinds of family: Extended family, single parent family and blended family. 
“Who takes care of children?” The answers to this question are varied: 1. Some parents put children in day care facilities. 2. Individuals or couples that are wealthy enough have a nanny. In some cases the woman's salary is adequate for family expenses, and the father becomes the house husband.