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Seventh Grade

Enghelab Secondary School 6 months ago

سروا یزدان پناه امین

Channel 1: This palace is in the south of . Channel 2: They are making a mosque for . Channel 3: This Quran is very . She got tired: Really! Nothing important? She turns off the TV, after a few minutes, she felt asleep and saw this strange dream: She was in a room full of flying TVs. She scared and ran and the TVs chased her. Suddenly someone throw her in a palace. In that palace there were mosques reading Quran and praying. She crashed to one of the mosques and woke up. Ouch! She said. What am I doing on the floor? She woke up and went to make something for lunch.

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fall asleep (present tense)
fell asleep (past tense)
Resalat Secondary School 10 months ago

پارميس زندى

My dad helps me in my lessons. He helps me to solve my math and science problems. I learnt from him how to study math and to be patient and serious.

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Resalat Secondary School 10 months ago

کیمیا عبدالهی

We went to Ramsar and shopped a lot.When we were visiting there , we saw a liver kebab shop. My father asked me If I wanted to eat liver kebab? I accepted. My father told me not to tell my mother. I accepted and I have never told my mother about it.

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We went to Ramsar and shopped a lot. When we were visiting "the shops" there, we saw a liver kebab shop.
My father asked me "if" I wanted to eat liver kebab"."
I accepted.
My father told me not to tell my mother. I accepted and I have never told my mother about it.
"Be careful about the spaces between your words and sentences."
Resalat Secondary School 10 months ago

پارمیس گنجی

One day, my father and I went to the mountain.We were climbing the mountain but suddenly I fell down.My father carried me and we went down.After some days I felt better.

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One day, my father and I went to the mountain. We were climbing the mountain but suddenly I fell down. My father carried me and we went down. After some days I felt better.
"Be careful about the spaces between your sentences."
Resalat Secondary School 10 months ago

هيوا صرافى زاده

One of my best memories refers to my mom's birthday. It was a lovely day and we were happy so much . We wanted to make a good and memorable day for my mom so we bought a beautiful cake and candles. I cleaned the room and didn't allow my mother to make dinner . And my father ordered dinner . In addition we bought a beautiful ring for my mom. We could surprise her and I have learnt from my father how i can make others happy . يكي از بهترين خاطرات من مربوط ميشه به تولده مادرم . ان روز خيلي پر احساس و خوب بود ما ميخواستيم يه روزه خوب و خاطره انگيز براي مادرم انجام بديم ما واسه مادرم يك كيك بسيار خوشگل خريديم با شمع هاي زيبا من اتاق را تميز كردم و اجازه ندادم شام درست كنه و پدرم غذا را سوارش داد و واسه مادرم يه انگشتر خيلي زيبا خريديم .بعد توانستيم مادرم را خيلي خوب سوپرايز كنيم . و من از پدرم ياد گرفتم كه چكونه يه روز خوب براي يكي انجام دهيم

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Resalat Secondary School 10 months ago

زهرا ملا محمدی

My best memory of my father is about "a day in park". When we went to the park I rode a bike . He had gotten it for me before . I like this memory because it shows I'm important for my father.

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My best memory of my father is about a day in a park. 
When we went to the park I rode a bike. He had gotten it for me before. 
I like this memory because it shows I'm important for my father.
Resalat Secondary School 10 months ago

هيوا صرافى زاده

One of my best memories refers to my mom's birthday. It was a lovely day and we were happy so much . We wanted to make a good and memorable day for my mom so we bought a beautiful cake and candles. I cleaned the room and didn't allow my mother to make dinner . And my father ordered dinner . In addition we bought a beautiful ring for my mom. We could surprise her and I have learned from my father how i can make others happy . يكي از بهترين خاطرات من مربوط ميشه به تولده مادرم ان روز خيلي پر احساس و خوب بود ما ميخواستيم يه روزه خوب و خاطره انگيز براي مادرم انجام بديم ما واسه مادرم يك كيك بسيار خوشگل خريديم با شمع هاي زيبا من اتاق را تميز كردم و اجازه ندادم شام درست كنه و پدرم غذا را سوارش داد و واسه مادرم يه انگشتر خيلي زيبا خريديم .بعد توانستيم مادرم را خيلي خوب سوپرايز كنيم . و من از پدرم ياد گرفتم كه چكونه يه روز خوب براي يكي انجام دهيم

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One of my best memories "is related to"/"goes back to" my mom's birthday.  (or simply One of my best memories "is" my mom's birthday. )
It was a lovely day and we were happy so much. We wanted to make a good and memorable day for my mom, so we bought a beautiful cake and candles. I cleaned the room and didn't allow my mother to make dinner . And my father ordered dinner. In addition, we bought a beautiful ring for my mom. We could surprise her and I have learned from my father how "I" can make others happy .

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Enghelab Secondary School 10 months ago

مهشید صدرالاسلامی

My best memory with my father was that day when I was so sad,because my best freind left me. I felt a bit lonely at school. When I told my father about that, he said, " My dear daughter, you don't need to be so sad about it. I know it's hard for you to forget her as she was your best friend, but now you must choose to be unhappy or try to make good new friends again.Trust yourself and make new friends .You'll feel happy then." When he said such a nice idea , I felt better and said," Thank you dad.Let's try it!" Now I have got good new friends. It was also a lesson for me to trust myself and find ways to solve the problems. My feelings have changed.If I have got a problem ,my mom or dad can help me too. This memory can help others to trust themselves and find ways for their problems and be happy. بهترین خاطره ی من و پدرم روزی بود که من خیلی غمگین بودم. چون بهترین دوستم از پیشم رفته بود. من در مدرسه کمی احساس تنهایی میکردم. وقتی به پدرم موضوع را گفتم. او گفت، " دختر عزیزم ، نیازی نیست اینقدر ناراحت باشی. میدونم که برات سخته فراموشش کنی چون او بهترین دوستت بود. اما حالا تو باید انتخاب کنی که ناراحت بمونی یا دوباره دوستان جدید و خوب پیدا کنی. به خودت اطمینان کن ودوست جدید پیدا کن. بعدش دوباره خوشحال میشی." وقتی او این فکر و ایده ی جالب را گفت،حالم بهتر شد و گفتم ،" ممنون بابا. بگذارببینیم چی میشه." حالا من دوستان جدید و خوبی دارم. این برای من درسی هم بود که بخودم اطمینان کنم و برای حل مشکلاتم راه حل پیدا کنم. احساساتم تغییر کرده و اگرمشکلی داشته باشم،مادر و پدرم هم میتونن کمکم کنن. این خاطره به بقیه هم کمک میکنه که به خودشون اطمینان کنند، برای مشکلاتشون راه حل پیدا کنند و شاد باشند.

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My best memory with my father "dates back" to a day when I was so sad, because my best "friend" "had left" me. I felt a bit lonely at school. When I told my father about that, he said, "My dear daughter, you don't need to be so sad about it. I know it's hard for you to forget her as she was your best friend, but now you must either choose to be unhappy or try to make good new friends again.Trust yourself and make new friends.You'll feel happy then." 
When he "talked about" such a nice idea, I felt better and said," Thank you dad. Let's try it!"
Now I have got good new friends. It was also a lesson for me to trust myself and find ways to solve the problems. My feelings have changed. If I have got a problem, my mom or dad can help me too.
This memory can help others to trust themselves and find "solutions" for their problems and be happy.

بهترین خاطره ی من و پدرم روزی بود که من خیلی غمگین بودم. چون بهترین دوستم از پیشم رفته بود.  
من در مدرسه کمی احساس تنهایی میکردم. وقتی به پدرم موضوع را گفتم. او گفت، " دختر عزیزم ، نیازی نیست اینقدر ناراحت باشی. میدونم که برات سخته فراموشش کنی چون او بهترین دوستت بود. اما
حالا تو باید انتخاب کنی که ناراحت بمونی یا دوباره دوستان جدید و خوب پیدا کنی. به خودت اطمینان کن
ودوست جدید پیدا کن. بعدش دوباره خوشحال میشی." 
وقتی او این فکر و ایده ی جالب را گفت،حالم بهتر شد و گفتم ،" ممنون بابا. بگذارببینیم چی میشه."
حالا من دوستان جدید و خوبی دارم. این برای من درسی هم بود که بخودم اطمینان کنم و برای حل 
مشکلاتم راه حل پیدا کنم. احساساتم تغییر کرده و اگرمشکلی داشته باشم،مادر و پدرم هم میتونن کمکم
کنن. این خاطره به بقیه هم کمک میکنه که به خودشون اطمینان کنند، برای مشکلاتشون راه حل پیدا کنند
 و شاد باشند.

* ... find "ways" for their problem "to be solved"
Thank you Mahshid, Please find the tiny modifications I have made to your essay. 
Great job.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

باران مددى

Name: The fault in our stars Author: John Green. This amazing book is the sixth novel by author John Green, published in January 2012.The title is inspired by Shakespeares play Julius Caesar: The fault is not in our stars, But in ourselves, that we are underlings. This novel is about a 16 year old girl named Hazel who has cancer. Her doctor suggested her to join Cancer Kid Support Group to battle with this cancer and also their parents force her to do that. After she had joint the group, she met a boy named Augustus Waters who also has cancer and he also lost one of his feet. They suggested each other to read each one's favorite novel. They had arguments about books. They got friend and fall in love. Unfortunately he passed away at the end of the movie but he had changed Hazel's view and opinion about life. My opinion: It is a very nice and romantic novel which inspires everyone and has won many prizes. However, It is also tragic and heart-breaking that sometimes made me cry a lot. The words and grammar which are used in this novel are easy to understand, especially the communications between Hazel and Augustus. I have learnt new words by reading this book and improve my English. I think the best way to improve English is reading books. Not only does it make you enjoy the story, but you can learn many words and grammars.

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Name: The fault in our stars
Author: John Green. 
This amazing book is the sixth novel by author John Green, published in January 2012.The title is inspired by Shakespeare’s play Julius Caesar: "The fault is not in our stars, but in ourselves, that we are underlings."

This novel is about a 16-year-old girl named Hazel who has cancer. Her doctor suggested that she joined Cancer Kid Support Group to battle with this cancer. Also their parents forced her to do that. After she joined the group, she met a boy named Augustus Waters who also had cancer and he also lost one of his feet. 
They advised each other to read the other one's favorite novel. They had arguments about books. They made friends and fell in love. Unfortunately, he passed away at the end of the story but he had changed Hazel's view and opinion about life. 

My opinion: It is a very nice and romantic novel which inspires everyone and has won many prizes. However, it is also tragic and heart-breaking. Sometimes it made me cry a lot. The words and grammar which are used in this novel are easy to understand, especially the communication between Hazel and Augustus. I have learnt new words by reading this book and it improved my English. I think the best way to improve your English is reading books. Not only does it make you enjoy the story, but you can learn many words and grammar points.
Marzdaran Secondary School Last year

مهران کریمی

Im Mehran karimi.Im 14 years old.I like my family.We are 3 people. I dont have any sisters and brothers. Now ,I want to explain one of my experiences in my life.one day, I wanted to buy something.We start to find different information,from different sources , like internet and different people. After some days ,my family and i found different information.My father said that I thing that you should buy this one, but I bought another one .After one month ,I understood that my fathers idea was better than me . from that time, I decided to think about my family's experience more than ago. It was one of my best experience.

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I’m Mehran Karimi. I’m 14 years old. I love my family. There are three members; I don’t have any sisters or brothers.
Now, I want to explain one of my experiences in my life. One day, I wanted to buy something. We start to look for different information from different sources like the internet and different people.
After some days, my family and I had found enough information. My father said that he thought that I should buy the one he said, however I did not listen to him and bought another one. After one month, I understood that my father’s idea had been better than me.
From that time, I decided to consider my family’s experience more than before. It was one of my best experience.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

باران مددى

I have two life achievements which are success in math and being good at swimming. Firstly, I can start with mathematics. I could win a math competition last year. At first I was not good at math and I had a lot of weaknesses But after a while, I started to practice more and I tried my best. In conclusion, I improved significantly. I had a good score in math. Secondly, I can talk about swimming which is my favorite sport now. When I was younger I was scared of pool and swimming. But my parents were trying to encourage me to join swimming classes. I accepted and after 6month I could swim professionally. After that I could win 2 competition. Generally, I think if you try your best, you can be the best. There is a sentence which always motivates me: Changing is so easy like drinking water, as long as you feel thirsty.

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I have two life achievements which are success in math and being good at swimming. Firstly, I can start with mathematics. I managed to win a math competition last year. At first I was not good at math and I had a lot of weaknesses. But after a while, I started to practice more and I tried my best. In conclusion, I improved significantly. I had a good score in math. 
Secondly, I can talk about swimming which is my favorite sport now. When I was younger I was scared of pools and swimming. But my parents were trying to encourage me to join swimming classes. I accepted and after 6 months I could swim professionally. After that I could win two competitions. Generally, I think if you try your best, you can be the best. There is a sentence which always motivates me: “Changing is so easy like drinking water, as long as you feel thirsty.”
Resalat Secondary School Last year

حنانه قربانی

I had 2 life achievements which are taking first place in Little writer competition & success in learning French . My first achievement was taking first place in Little writer competition . When I was in my 4th grade , I won the prize of Little writer competition I went to the school library & read the best novels & I used dictionary to improve my book . My friends said : you cant write this book never ever, but my teacher told me : The greatest pleasure in life is doing what people say you can not ! So I continued and tried more. Finally I wrote my book and won the prize . My second achievement was about learning French . This is my achievement because at first I didnt know anything about French . I practiced a lot with my teacher and classmates . I started to write and read in French and watched some French cartoons , so after one year I could speak French well . What I learned from my achievements is that nothing is impassible as Dr. Ali Shariati said : If you feel the progress and grow, even in the desert you will grow.

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I have had 2 life achievements which are ranking first in the Little Writer Competition, and success in learning French. When I was in the 4th grade of primary school, I won the prize of the Little Writer Competition. I went to the school library and read the best novels and used dictionaries to improve my book. My friends said: “You can never ever write this book”, but my teacher told me: “The greatest pleasure in life is doing what people say you cannot do!” So I continued and tried more. Finally, I wrote my book and won the prize. My second achievement was about learning French. This is my achievement because at first I didn’t know anything about French. I practiced a lot with my teacher and classmates. I started to write and read in French and watched some French cartoons, and after one year I could speak French well. What I learned from my achievements is that nothing is impassible as Dr. Ali Shariati said: “If you feel the progress and grow, even in the desert you will grow.”
Resalat Secondary School Last year

آنیتا زرین قلمی

Here, I write something about my life achievement: I had 2 life achievements which are studying and playing basketball. My first life achievement was studying. I studied lots of books about brain surgery. My mom also helped me to understand these books better. I want to be a brain surgeon and it's my dream job of my childhood till now. I do my best struggle every year at school to become a surgeon, I search everywhere to find and learn some information. Every year I try to be better to gain my goals. I think, I can become one of the best surgeons in the world. For being a good surgeon, I should study hard that I do it every year. I would like to become same as professor Samiei, because he's talented in his job and he's symbol of my life. The second life achievement was basketball. I started to play it when I was 10. In my previous school we had a basketball competition, It was the first time that I was playing in it , so I was very happy. Our school became the third grade in that competition, we also won a prize. I love this field because it's one of the hardest and the most famous field in the world. I watch many basketball games on TV such as NBA. In this sport my symbols are Lakers and Chicago Bulls teams. I Love basketball, so I'm going to be the best in it. These achievements are important in my life because I'd like to be successful and helpful in my life.

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I want to write something about my life achievements. I have had 2 life achievements which are studying and playing basketball. My first life achievement was studying. I studied lots of books about brain surgery. My mom also helped me to understand these books better. I want to be a brain surgeon and it has been my dream job since childhood. I do my best struggle every year at school to become a surgeon. I search everywhere to find and learn new information. Every year, I try to be better to reach my goals. I think I can become one of the best surgeons in the world. For being a good surgeon, I should study hard; that is what I do every year. I would like to become someone like professor Samiei, because he is talented in his job and he is my role model. My second life achievement was learning to play basketball. I started to play it when I was 10. In my previous school, we had a basketball competition. It was the first time that I was playing in a basketball team, so I was very happy. Our school ranked third in that competition, and we also won a prize. I love this sport because it is one of the hardest and the most famous sports in the world. I watch many basketball games, such as NBA competitions, on TV. In this sport my favorite teams are Los Angeles Lakers and Chicago Bulls. I love basketball, so I am going to be the best in it. These achievements are important in my life because I would like to be successful and helpful in my life.
Enghelab Secondary School Last year

پارميدا آذر سعيد

I want to become a teacher, because I like teaching. I like to teach at schools and I think it has a good payment. In my dreams I see myself as a teacher that Im asking the (student names). Then I teach them the (alphabets) and let them to ask their questions.I will help them to be the best students. Im (sure) that this job is the best one for me.I really like English, so I like to teach English in future. I want to become a friendly and kind teacher for my students. I like to (talk) to my friends and (help) them as a friend not as a teacher. I searched a lot about this job in Wikipedia site.

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I want to become a teacher, because I like teaching. I like to teach at schools and I think it has a good payment. In my dreams, I see myself as a teacher asking the (students' names). Then, I teach them the (alphabets) and let them ask their questions. I will help them to be the best students. I’m (sure) that this job is the best for me. I really like English, so I like to teach English in future. I want to become a friendly and kind teacher for my students. I like to (talk) to my friends and (help) them as a friend not as a teacher. I searched a lot about this job on Wikipedia website.
Enghelab Secondary School Last year

باناز تقی بارکی

want to become a dentist in future, because I like this job and I want to (help) sick people with my medical information. I like to be an important person. I want to be a famous person in history. I can learn a lot of techniques of dentistry by taking different (lessons). But this job is nt great because it has some disadvantages, such as getting different illnesses from my patients and its very bad. I will put my dentistry instrument in my (bag). I like to have a big table with different toys for children in my room. I m (sure) that I can do it very well. By this job I can earn a lot of money and I can travel around the world and see Buckingham (palace). I got a lot of information about this job from Wikipedia.

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I want to become a dentist in future because I like this job and I want to (help) sick people with my medical information. I like to be an important person. I want to be a famous person in history. I can learn a lot of techniques of dentistry by taking different (lessons). However, this job is not great because it has some disadvantages such as getting different illnesses from my patients. I will put my dentistry instruments in my (bag). I like to have a big table with different toys for children in my room. I am (sure) that I can do it very well. I can earn a lot of money in this job, and I can travel around the world and see Buckingham (Palace). I got a lot of information about this job from Wikipedia.