Students' Texts

Eighth Grade

Resalat Secondary School 8 months ago

پریا طاهری

Last weekend was my birthday. I wanted to invite my friends and my relatives to my birthday. I went out to give all the cards to them I called my friend to know where are they . First l went to the gym to see my best friend . She often plays sport . We went shopping together and we bought all the things that we need for the party . Then we came back home and relax for a few minutes . Then we started to stick all the balloons to the walls . After that we went to a bakery and we bought a nice birthday cake . We had a lot fun together .

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I went out to give all the cards to them I called my friend to know "where they were". 
لطفا این مورد را برای همیشه به خاطر بسپارید
I want to know where you are.
این جمله سوالی نیست. یک جمله ی خبری است. و محل صحیح فعل آن پس از فاعل میباشد
 گفته میشود indirect speech در انگلیسی به این الگو، نقل قول غیر مستقیم یا 
I called my friend to know "where they were". 
 در این جمله فعل ماضی هست طبق قانون گرامری، باید قعل دوم هم ماضی باشد call چون فعل 
 استفاده میکنیمwere از are برای همین به جای 


We went shopping together and we bought all the things that we "needed" for the party . 
Then we came back home and "relaxed" for a few minutes.
(زمان تمای فعل ها باید گذشته باشد)
Marzdaran Secondary School 9 months ago

مهران کریمی

I like different sports.My favorite Sport is basketball and ping pong.This summer,I went the gym on odd days. I like to play basketball at the school,but my friends like to play football.

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I like different sports. My favorite "sport" is basketball and ping pong.This summer, I went "to" the gym on odd days.
I like to play basketball at the school, but my friends like to play football.
"Be careful about the spaces between your sentences."
Marzdaran Secondary School 9 months ago

مهران کریمی

A week has 7 days. Saturday, Sunday,Monday,Tuesday,Wednesday,Thursday and Friday are the days of a week. I usually stay at home on weekends and watch TV.

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A week has 7 days.
Saturday, Sunday, Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday and Friday are the days of a week.
I usually stay at home on weekends and watch TV.
"Be careful about the spaces."
Marzdaran Secondary School 9 months ago

مهران کریمی

Every continent has some countries.I like to see america France and Thailand in the future. South Africa is very beautiful.I like to travel and visit African people.

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Every continent has some countries. I like to see "America," France and Thailand in the future. South Africa is very beautiful. I like to travel and visit African people.
"Be careful about the spaces between your sentences."
Enghelab Secondary School 9 months ago

یگانه محمد

Giraffes are living in South Africa.My grand father loves Australian animals documentary. My best friend is living in North America but she is European and she cant come to Iran because she says Iran is famous to be a bad country in the world. The people of China can make good things.

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Giraffes are living in South Africa.
My "grandfather" loves Australian animals documentaries. My best friend is living in North America but she is European and she can't come to Iran because she says Iran is famous to be a bad country in the world. The people of China can make good things.

Iran is famous to be a bad country in the world. -> Iran is an "infamous" country in the world.
9 months ago

My family and I live in Asia.My father doesn't like Australia. I'm not going to Africa.Mr.Wang is chinese.There are a lot of coutries in the world.Iran is a big and beautiful country.Usa is in North America. Fifa world cup 2010 was in the "South Africa".pourtugal won the European cup in France.

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My family and I live in Asia. My father doesn't like Australia. I'm not going to Africa. Mr.Wang is "Chinese".There are a lot of coutries in the world. Iran is a big and beautiful country. "USA" is in "the"North America. "The 2010 FIFA World Cup" was in the "South Africa". "Portugal" won the European Cup in France.
"Be careful about the spaces between your sentences."
Last year

محمد جواد عبادی

Mountain climbing One of my best memories with my father is our mountain climbing memory. That day my father taught me that I should not be scared of height in mountains. When We went for mountain climbing he climbed so fast but I could not climb like him. I was scared and I stopped there , I could not move. He came and took my hand , he told me if you scare you could not be a brave boy. Then we started climbing mountain step by step and slow. After few minutes I started to climb alone. Then We went to the top of the mountain. It is amazing I can do that , I said. It was a great memory.

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When we went for mountain climbing he climbed so fast but I could not "keep up with" him.

He came and took my hand, he told me if I am scared, I could not be a brave boy. [indirect speech]
He said to me: "If you are scared, you could not be a brave boy." [direct speech]

Then we started climbing "the" mountain step by step and "slowly".

"It is amazing I can do that," I said.

Well done. Great job. Thank you.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

بلكا كاتب شيروان

My name is Belka Kateb in 9th grade . Today I want to talk about one of my best memories with my father . It's about eight years ago when I loved Tom and Jerry toys , but none the stores had that . Suddenly one night my father came back home late . when he came back I was drawing .He called me . He had a bag in his hands . He told me it's yours . When I opened it I was surprised . There were two Toms in it . I told him to change my dolls . The next day he came back home late again . I understood he exchanged them for me . When he came back I was happy I had my dolls . I love this memory because my father tried to find them for me I learned I have to never lose my hope .

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My name is Belka Kateb. I'm in 9th grade. 
Today, I want to talk about one of my best memories with my father. It's about eight years ago when I loved Tom and Jerry toys, but "none of" the stores had "them". 
Suddenly, one night my father came back home late. When he came back I was drawing. He called me. He had a bag in his hands. 
He told me (that) it was mine. (or He said: "It's yours.") [indirect versus direct speech]
When I opened it, I was surprised. There were two Toms in it. I told him  to change my dolls. The next day he came back home late again. I understood he "had" exchanged them for me. When he came back I was happy I had my dolls. 
I love this memory because my father tried his best to find them for me. I learned "I never" have to lose my hope . 

* You are pushing too many space buttons! 
  Do not put space before a period.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

دلارام امينى مقدم

My best memory with my father was about when I was a child and I went out with my father. In the street we saw a rich man that annoyed a poor man. After a while we saw the rich man that became miserable. I like this memory because my father told me we should be careful about our behaviour. I learned from my father that we shouldn't annoy anyone.

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Resalat Secondary School Last year

ترانه ضیائی

My best memory with my father is that we went to Rudkhan castle.We went to Phooman's castle.20KM after Phooman we arrived to Rudkhan castles. It has 1000 steps. It was so beautiful and it was so tall too. The weather was very hot because of that we buy something there that the name is Escamoo.It was like ice cream but it was colder than ice cream.I like this memory because we have fun time. We want to go to tiptop there .All of the people in the way say "you can't go to top of the mountain "but we could go. And all of the time we laugh and we were happy. I learnt from my father a lot of things. I learnt from my father that I must be brave and don't scared from anything. I learnt that I can do all of the things but I must have persevere.

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My best memory with my father is about we had to Rudkhan castle. We also went to Fuman's castle. 20 kilometers after Fuman, we arrived in/at Rudkhan castles. 
It had 1000 steps. It was so beautiful and it was so tall, too. The weather was very hot and because of that we bought something there “which was called Escamoo.” It was like ice cream but (it was) colder.

I like this memory because we had “a fun time”. (It’s more common to say we had a lot of fun. Or we had a time full of fun.)

We “decided” to go to the “top/hilltop/summit”. All of the people in the way said: "You can't go to the top of the mountain" but we made it.  (or we proved them wrong.)
And all of the time we laughed and (we) were happy.

I learnt from my father a lot of things. I learnt from my father that I must be brave and not scare from anything. I learnt that I can do "anything I want" but I must persevere. (or I must be/remain persevering.)

* Notice: The word "tiptop" is an adjective. 
Resalat Secondary School Last year

غزل حميدى فراهانى

In the name of God Fathers are very important for their girl to support. They increase their childrens self steam. Children feel safe with their fathers. One day when I was 3 years old my father and i, went out with his car. In a street he went out of car. Then the doors became locked. I was in the car and I couldnt unlock the door. The key was in the car. My father told me to take the car key and unlocked the door but I couldnt understand what to do! I was near to cry. My father calmed me down and said not to cry. He said I go to bring someone to open the doors and I will come back soon. I trusted my father and sat down on the car seat. My father came back soon and opened the doors. I kissed him and told him: That you are my strong support. At the end I hope my father be healthy for ever and I hope this for all over the world.

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In the name of God

“Fathers are” very important “for their daughters to feel supported”. 
They increase their “children’s self-esteem”. Children feel safe with their fathers.

One day when I was three years old, my father and I went out “by/in” his car. 
In a street, he went out of "the" car. Then the doors became locked. I was in the car and I couldn’t unlock the door. 

The key was in the car.  My father told me to take the car key and "unlock" the door but I couldn’t understand what to do! I was near to "crying". 
My father calmed me down and "told me" not to cry. 

He said (that) he would go to bring someone to open the doors and "he would" come back soon.  [indirect speech]
(He said: "I will go to bring someone to open the doors and I will be back soon.)  [direct speech]

I trusted my father and sat down on the car seat.
My father came back soon and opened the doors.
I kissed him and told him that he was my strong support. (I kissed him and said to him: "You are my strong support, dad.")

At the end, I hope (that) my father "is/will be" healthy "forever" and I hope "the same" for all over the world.

* I was near to tears. / I was going to cry. / I was near to crying.
* He calmed me down and said that I must not cry.
* Please study and learn about indirect and direct speech.

* We have something called "subjunctive".
    Example: { It is essential (that) you be studious.} 
* But "hope" is different. We must have a noun clause after "hope".
    Example: { I hope that you "are / will be" studious.}
Resalat Secondary School Last year

مبینا غفور

My best memory with my father is that one day when I was seven my first tooth drop and I was so scared. Then he had the best idea ever; he took me to amusement park. And he bought me a fun box and some dolls and I was so excited and I forgot the fear I had because of my tooth dropped. I like this memory because he wanted to make my fear less. And if you ask me he could be a children psychologist. I learn from my father that the best way is to deceive children; so theyll forget their worry.

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My best memory with my father is that one day when I was seven "one of my teeth dropped for the first time" and I was so scared. 
Then he had the best idea ever; he took me to an amusement park. (And) he bought me a fun box and some dolls and I was so excited and I forgot the fear I had “because” my tooth had dropped. (or because of my tooth being dropped.)
I like this memory because he wanted to make my fears gone (or faded away). And if you ask me he could be a children’s psychologist.
I learn/learnt from my father that the best way in such occasions is to deceive children; so they’ll forget their worry.

* I forgot the fear of my dropped tooth.
* He wanted to make my fears forgotten.
* The best way for children to forget their worries is to to be deceived.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

آیلین خلیلی مریان

My best memory with my father was that one day we went on a trip to north of Iran. We had a lot of fun there. Suddenly a ball fell into the sea. My father went there to help them and brought the ball back. I have learnt from my father that it's good to help people who have problems. I love this memory because I learnt a lot and I had so much fun.

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My best memory with my father was that one day we went on a trip to "the" north of Iran.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

نيكتا سالم

My best memory with my father is that one day my father and I went to the toy shop and I bought some beautiful toys. I like this memory because we had lots of fun with each other and I have learnt from my father how to select some useful things and also I have learnt that I can enjoy in every situation.

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I like this memory because we had lots of fun with each other and I have learnt from my father how to select some useful things and "I also" have learnt that I
 can "enjoy every situation".
Resalat Secondary School Last year

پریا طاهری

One of my best memories with my father is that one day I was alone with him at home because my mum wasn't there. We did a lot of things such as cooking. I tried to make the food on my own but I burnt my finger. I cried a lot but my father pacified me. Then we started cooking again. I really love this memory because I learnt cooking for the first time. I have learn from my father that if you want to do something you should try hard and learn it.

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I have "learnt or learned" from my father that if you want to do something you should try hard and learn it.
All in all it was fantastic, thanks.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

درسا پيوندى

My book is Meet The Martians, written by Stephan Radley. I choose it because my teacher recommended it to me. This book refers to three friends: Pablo, Daunta and Ling. They live on Mars and go to a very small school. They are on summer holidays. One day the three friends look at Dauntas computer and they see that many people have negative feelings about Mars. They got so sad. Two days later, they find out about the story of a Space TV on earth. They were looking for a new band. So they mail their video to them and they answer: You should come to London on Thursday, August 19. They went to London and they won. Suddenly the peoples view was changed about Mars. I learn that for what I want to prove to others, I have to fight and every cloud has a silver lining.

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Resalat Secondary School Last year

ملیکا طهماسبی

My life achievement is math Olympiad. I won in ''The purple comet '', a hard math Olympiad. Its based on teamwork. I won its prize and it was an important achievement in my life. In Farvardin 28th, my friends and I took the exam. We were getting ourselves ready for its next exam, so we didn't think about that difficult marathon. When our principal announced our rank, we were shocked. We couldn't believe it. Our rank was the 114th in world! I hadnt studied a lot but l got something else. It was teamwork so we could cover our mistakes. I think working in a group is better than individually. I felt proud. William Shakespeare says: Three sentences for getting success are 1-Know more than others. 2-Work more than others. 3-Expect less than others.

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Resalat Secondary School Last year

ثنا ناصرى

Hi my name is Sana.l'm 15 years old. I had a life achievement. Which is winning a championship in Tebian's festival. From the first we chose physics specialty and we were so embarrassed when we saw everybody chose another interesting specialty like art and design. After that we chose a strange and hard project, so we couldn't find our expensive equipment to experiment easily, of course when we found them one of them didn't work! We were disappointed when we didn't see a good result and one time we left it! But after a week we came back to our job so we restarted it and suddenly we saw a good result! Then we smiled after two months :) Anyway we learn that: victory is obtained by failures and you only fail when you stop training  Failure isn't the end its progress and losers are people who afraid of losing

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Hi, my name is Sana. l'm 15 years old. I have a life achievement which is winning a championship in Tebian's festival. From the first, we chose physics as our specialty and we were so embarrassed when we saw everybody had chosen another interesting specialty like art and design. After that, we chose a strange and hard project, so we couldn't find our expensive equipment to experiment easily. As a matter of fact, even when we found some, one of the pieces didn't work! We were disappointed when we didn't see a good result and one time we left it! But after a week we came back to our job; so we restarted it and suddenly we saw a good result! Then we smiled after two months :) 
Anyway, we have learned that victory is obtained by failures and you only fail when you stop training. Failure isn't the end; its progress and losers are people who are afraid of losing.
Resalat Secondary School Last year

فاطمه دلاورى

I had two life achievements which are traveling to Paris and painting. My firs life achievement was traveling to Paris. Paris is the best country for your summer vacation , because you can get a lot of experiences there. I was in louver museum and I was looking at things , when I saw Koorosh inscription then I understood, we had a rich history and I am proud of my country. My second life achievement is painting, I started painting when I was 5 years old. At first I couldnt paint very well but gradually I became better and now I can draw and paint well. Painting and drawing make me calm. I really like to have an exhibition to show my paintings.I should try to be successful. If we try hard, we will be successful in our life.

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Resalat Secondary School Last year

مهديه نجمى

My name is mahdiye. I'm 15 years old. I live in Tehran. I have two life achievements: Which are winning a competition and getting ranked under 100 in mathematical olympiad(purple comet) My first achievement was getting medal in my favorite sport which is teakwondo I tried a lot for this competition. When my name was called among the first three people and they gave my medal I felt proud and happy. I understood by doing something seriously you will be successful. As Hamilton Holt said: you can't have any valuable things in your life easily the only way to reach gold result is working hard. My second achievement was participating on purple comet I got acceptable rank which made me very happy but I will do my best for being better this year. I should have more effort. as result, what I learn from my achievements is that people should use their abilities to be successful.

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My name is Mahdiyeh. I'm 15 years old. I live in Tehran. I have two life achievements, which are winning a competition and getting ranked under 100 in mathematical Olympiad called the purple comet. 
My first achievement was getting a medal in my favorite sport which is taekwondo. I tried a lot for this competition. When my name was called among the first three people and they gave my medal I felt proud and happy. I understood by doing something seriously you will be successful. Hamilton Holt has said that you can't have any valuable things in your life easily; the only way to reach gold result is by working hard.
My second achievement was participating in purple comet. I got an acceptable rank which made me very happy but I will do my best for being better this year. I should make more effort. 
As a result, what I learn from my achievements is that people should use their abilities to be successful.